As I mentioned last week, I’ve been working on a new edition of A Flock of Crows is Called a Murder that, among other things, restores the infamous missing epilogue, plus fixes various issues with the layout from the most recent edition, which was a scan produced by BookSurge of the original DarkTales edition of Crows. This edition is now available at my Lulu storefront and should become available at Amazon.com and other outlets over the next few months. I also plan to do a Kindle edition once the ISBN and distribution is finalized. In the meantime, please visit my Lulu store and check it out there!
Another thing I changed is the teaser excerpt at the beginning of the book. The original one emphasized the book’s more horrific turn as it nears the end of the story:
His mouth opened, forcing hers to open, too …
She felt the first clammy, sticky bubbles of slime coming out of his throat, dribbling into hers. Salty mucous, gunk like the stuff that had slurped out of the dashboard of their car after it had died by the side of the road. Her stomach heaved, heaved so hard she thought it should be strong enough to knock him right off her, though of course it wasn’t, that was just a desperate fantasy as the stuff choked her. She couldn’t breath; he had gummed up her nose with snot, her mouth was full of it. He wanted her to swallow, that was it.
Swallow, and breathe, and be like him
What can I say? Back in the day, I liked to go for the gross-out, as they say. But the new teaser is from a scene earlier in the book, one that several readers have particularly liked:
Nick Garson had watched, with a sort of detached interest, as his hands had reached into his jacket pocket and pulled out his gun and started shooting at the man in the bulldozer …
It wasn’t until the bulldozer crashed into the pit that Nick began to think that maybe this was something he could get in trouble for; so he tucked the gun back into his jacket and went back to his car, thinking that he would just be moving along back to Buffalo, leaving no one the wiser that he had ever been here.
There were still a lot of loose bullets on the driver’s seat. He scooped them up before he sat down, and then watched his hands reload the gun. He wondered why they were doing that; maybe they were expecting to be called on to shoot someone else.
His two little friends were just sliding the clip back into place when he heard the sirens approaching. Somebody must have heard the shots and called the police. Bad hands, Nick thought. Bad, bad, bad! Loading the gun when they should have been helping him drive away!
The cop car came tearing in from the north, braked rapidly and stopped at an angle at the side of the road. Two policemen got out, looking around cautiously. They had their own guns out; he could see the weapons in their hands.
One cop reached into the cruiser and pulled out the radio mouthpiece and started talking into it, while the other kept his gaze flicking around the scene. They seemed quite wary. Reasonable, Nick thought, considering that there had been gunfire. Funny; he felt more like a witness than a perpetrator, as if he should run over to them with his palms in the air and say I saw who did it, officers, it was these hands here!
Of course, he wasn’t about to do something crazy like that.
An improvement? I think so. But still, in the end, this remains a horror novel, and that nasty mucousy stuff from the first teaser still plays a surprisingly major role in what happens at the end.
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11 thoughts on “New Version of “Flock of Crows” Available!”
We have the “First Edition”, but we must get this one, especially now that the epilogue has been reunited with it!
you’re a horror writer for sure…
The mucous IS very descriptive (yeaarggh)…if I were pregnant right now, I’d be blowing chunks. Well done!
I wish I could get into reading horror! i would read all of yours, but it scares me alot!
Gahhh!! I have to remember to hit your blog when I’m not eating, lol.
I have to remind myself to take at least a short breather between reading your Dennis blog and here! Although, horror actually often has an element of humor as well (do you think? And am I making it up or have I already said this before and am having a total senior moment?)
Sorry, my brain just began to melt into a festering puddle of …
Yes, you’re right about that. In fact I think “Crows” is a pretty funny book, at least up until the point when it’s not. 🙂
That “admin” chick who just posted a comment you currently hold in line for moderation purposes? That was me, coming at you from another universe. Sorry.
Just finished reading it (2007 version) and ran off the end of the page. Is page 248 really supposed to be blank? Is the next-to-the-last line supposed to be “Henry closed his eyes.”? [I didn’t use the actual last line on 247 since it might be a spoiler.]
If there is supposed to be more, please send the remainder, so I can give you a full review.
That is the ending, but there is supposed to be an epilogue that was cut for length. I will get you the new version.