After our previous “random acceptance” anomaly, we’re back in familiar territory, with a rejection letter from a literary agent I was hoping to get to represent Long Before Dawn:
As you can see, the main reason for this rejection was that the vampires in Long Before Dawn are not “sympathetic”. There is a reason for this, of course, which I will attempt to put succinctly:
VAMPIRES ARE MONSTERS!!!!
Vampires are not sympathetic. They don’t “hate what they’ve become” and they don’t “prey only on those who prey on others”. They prey on anybody they can find. I know that ever since Lestat and his cronies came along, it’s been hip and cool for vampires to be tormented and misunderstood and mopey in an I-Paint-My-Lightbulbs-Black-And-Listen-To-The-Cure sort of way, but you know what? I detest those vampire sad-sacks. Okay, fine, I was a huge fan of Buffy and Angel and they had a couple of vampires who were sort of angsty and sort of self-loathing, one of whom (Spike, of course) was my favorite character on both shows, but these vampires were the exceptions. All the other ones were predatory scumbags. (And Spike didn’t get to be really self-loathing until the last season of Buffy, when he got his soul back and got rather whiny for a while. Fortunately he got over it.)
But, I digress. As you can tell by the above rant, I don’t care if “sympathetic” vampires make for New York Times bestsellers; I’ve got no interest in writing or reading about such creatures. So obviously, even if she had decided to represent me, it would have been an extremely poor fit and very likely wouldn’t have worked out.
On the other points raised in the letter, I eventually eliminated the omniscient point of view from the book. I very rarely use that POV anymore, and when I went back and edited Long Before Dawn for its Lulu release, those scenes went away or were rewritten.
She was kinda right about the sex, too; I did end up toning that down.